Welcome to Baltimore Mick's step sister said. It was mikes first day of school. welcome to Baltimore high school sally said. Mike ask, why is it so big? sally said, because its a black and white school. Mike walked right throw the door. he felt very cool. he said to himself. begin a cizner feels pretty good. this school is way different from New York city high school. When mike was trying to find his classes all the girls were looking at him whispering, who's that sexy guy. It's sally's step brother from New York, he's a cener.
When mike got to his last class it was full of black kids and he was talking to them an he thought they were pretty cool, but when he was talking to them in the hallway, thats when the trouble started.....
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ReplyDeleteHey Greg! First of all,I loved how you let us know what Mike was thinking when he first walked into the school. I also liked that you put in what other kids at the school were thinking about Mike. Its lets you know what Mike kind of looks like with out giving a lot of details. Some Suggestions I have are that you should watch out for spelling and grammar. Also, watch out for punctuation. Overall,I thought it was great and i can't wait to read more!
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